THanks for the help.  I never really thought about that.  It would definately help the lenght problem if i cut it there though.  Im really new to the whole composing thing so any insights would be well apreciated.  I promise not to be offended if you can point out anything that can be imroved on.  Looking forward to more of your poetry as well : D Very nice choice of wording.  You have an ability to be concise and choose such perfect words to capture the meaning and paint it so vividly and richly for the reader.  Its an ability i really do envy.