Heya,

 

I'm no expert myself lol. Only started writing poetry because of the Coffee Girl script. But I can give you a few pointers.

 

 

I don't know how many share my style of writing... but I don't try capturing thoughts down on paper. Instead, I try to capture motions and emotions. Music has a way of moving people.... so I try to capture the essence of a poem's rhythm.

 

 

Edward Allen Poe does this. Look up "The Raven".

 

 

Also... Study the poem meters. Shakespeare specialized in Iambic Pentameters where every second syllable is stressed. Example: "i HEAR thy WIND, thy WIND has CALLED for THEE. and SYMbols SHINE deSIGNS to SET me FREE."

 

 

Another pointer... study a bit of Linguistics: Phonetics (The sounding of words) and Semantics (the impact of a word's meaning). Sometimes too many T's make things sound choppy while many S words make things sound slippery. Just speak out your poems and feel its rhythm and you'll know what I mean. Feel out the rhythm, dude.

I just read your "All for you" poem. Again, clever poem patterns. Tells a story of suicide. Most advice I could give is from the message before. 

 

If you want a bit more, here:  Novel writers expand. They write their hearts content.  Screenwriters condense. They keep their word count to an absolute minimal, chopping out words not required. So practice that with your poems. Keep the main words that project the idea but chop out the unnecessary ones.

 

Mostly, I prefer poems remain in tact to maintain one's personal style so we all don't have a poem that has the same meter. This note is just to show you what i did. 

Thank  you for your compliments.  I think the content of your work is beyond satisfactory, but if you are inquiring into different structures of poetry I suggest maybe taking a class or researching different measures, techniques and poets.  However, today is a lucky day to live in because no one really requires you to live by those laws of structure.  It's good stuff to know though- kind of like reading music if you compose- it opens up a huge span of creative outlets that are so subtle and yet extremely expressive.